Owing to the technology change at such a rapid pace, the camera changes a lot.
The camera increases many different functions. More and more people will use them to make the pictures looks more beautiful by using those functions. In addition, after they upload the pictures to the computers, they will also use some software to fix a slice in the image, such as remove their acnes, scars and wrinkles, white out their face, make their face much smaller, make their body become slender, or anything else. Why many people do this? One of the reasons is that they actually want to give other people a good impression. Moreover; nowadays, when we surf on the net, we will see many pictures about others everywhere. Then, it is really hard for us to determine whether they are true or fake. But I think it is usually contrast of the fact. Above all, it proves that the saying is not actually correct.
Hi Connie,
回覆刪除開頭片語owing to...pace寫得很好，文意舖陳的也算順，但可惜的是最後一句你才寫出回應題目的意思。這樣寫比較不適合英文文章的寫法，會大大大大大大大大大大大大大大(不是按鍵卡到)的扣分。最好開始就讓讀者明白你的論點是什麼，再接著寫。Of course, this requires practice.
Some grammar questions for you to think about:
1. the camera是單數還是複數呢? 加單數動詞還是複數動詞?
2. 請想辦法把這一句合在一起:To those functions, more and more people will use them to make the pictures looks more beautiful. 知道為什麼嗎?
3. Why many people will do like this?
你這個句子的do是及物動詞，你覺得少了什麼?
再者，這些人已經在做了，未來助動詞will適合嗎?
4. 倒數第三行的第二個代名詞用it對嗎?
Hope to see your revise your journal soon.